tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8362310301801753615.post2913795690000148170..comments2011-11-14T09:42:31.681-08:00Comments on Bree Motley Views !: The American Justice System Killed an Innocent Man!bree motleyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00307814333669500580noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8362310301801753615.post-25518099311653860442011-11-14T09:42:31.681-08:002011-11-14T09:42:31.681-08:00Peer Reponse:
1.Yes I agreed with my partners int...Peer Reponse:<br /><br />1.Yes I agreed with my partners interpretation of my argument. She hits it right on the mark on what I wanted the purpose of my blog essay to portray. One way that I can revise my argument to make it clearer was like my partner stated and that is to give more background about the witnesses and their actual statement so that the reader can accurately choose what side they are on.<br /><br />2. Yes I found my partners feedback to be very helpful because it reassured me that my main for the reader was clear and also that my argument was clear and the reader could see how passionate I was about this topic. <br /><br />3. The first Thing I want to revise about this blig after reading my partners response is the background information about the witnesses. I can spend more time on the section that talks about the statements of of the witnesses and how they were sufficient evidence to accuse Troy Davis.<br /><br />4. My Argument as I would define it is : The American Justice system has recently killed a potentially innocent man, and therefore the death penalty should be abolished.bree motleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00307814333669500580noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8362310301801753615.post-13460538624478355442011-11-14T09:27:53.900-08:002011-11-14T09:27:53.900-08:001. Yes, this essay makes a very clear argument. Yo...1. Yes, this essay makes a very clear argument. You did a good job choosing what side of the argument you were on. You started your argument from the first paragraph and stuck to that side. The argument that i think you are trying to make is that innocent people are being killed by the death penalty. Once the court makes a decision it is final, no matter how many people are against the decision. <br />2. Although there were thousands of pretests and many powerful people spoke out against the execution, nothing happened.<br />3. She talked about the case of Troy Davis. She explained the case and then went on to tell us what the final decision was.<br />4. I dont know if you used examples, but you used videos and pictures to of people protesting that explain which side of the argument your on.<br />5. Yes, you tell us the whole story and tell us what side of the story your on. You tell us who was against the execution and the final decision of the trial.<br />6. Yes you did a good job of explaining the significance of the videos and pictures.<br />7. I would like to know a little more about the witnesses and their side of the story before I choose what side i am on. <br />8. Yes, the last paragraph of your essay is veyr persuasive.Maura Weirhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12996483508956415992noreply@blogger.com